Translation Check by Chrouya
Script: C3 OVA[edited][fine timed Yukikaze][QC-Treize,Ninja].ass
Workraw: C3 OVA.avi

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*comment*

*Seeing that QC is done, I won't go further into English grammar mistakes*


18
It would've been better if Kuroe came along with us instead of her.
I'd rather invite Kuroe instead... If only she could come along with us.
(linesplit? There are 2 sentences being said here)

19
This is a school activity, so you can't really have your way with it.
You can't do much about it, however. This is a school activity, after all.
*swap the sentences*

20
Well, I just feel bad leaving Kuroe behind to do the housework.
I kinda feel bad about leaving Kuroe behind to do the housework, but...
*she's making a contrast with the following line*

21
I have a feeling this field trip is going to be a blast!
I have a feeling this so called field trip is going to be a blast!
*rinkangakkou "to iu yatsu" = "something called"*

25
{\pos(72,469)\fscx113.75\fscy107.5\4c&H4284B3&\c&H26D930&}¢Chaos on the {\c&HA84FDC&}School Field Trip!£
{\pos(72,469)\fscx113.75\fscy107.5\4c&H4284B3&\c&H26D930&}¢Confusion at the {\c&HA84FDC&}School Field Trip!£
*when the title says "konfyuujon", I can't let you edit that*

50
There's supposedly a small shrine in a cave nearby there.
There's supposedly a suspicious cave housing a small shrine nearby there.

51
This is getting more suspicious by the minute.
This is becoming more and more dubious.
*would sound repetitive elsewise*

52
That cave is probably where the monster lives.
And naturally, this monster wields monstrous power.
*This probably was a guesslation*

55
I'm not going to believe that thing exists until I see it first.
I'd love to see it if that monster actually exists.
*kansaiben, so the grammar was probably guesslated...But pick the one that fits best. I don't know.*

64
I'll just tell him that I'll do it when I have the time.
I'll just tell him that I'll keep it in mind.
*oboete okimasu = to remember it for later*

71
I did everything {\i1}exactly{\i0} the way I was taught to do it.
I did everything {\i1}exactly{\i0} the way it was explained.
*Translation-wise*

95
Let's go swimming!
How about some swimming?
*It's a rhetorical question. Japanese people love em*

114
I don't usually wear one.
I'm not wearing one today.
*it's not her habit, just for today*

115
I feel restricted when I do, so I can't really bring myself to like them.
As I feel restricted when I wear one, I can't really bring myself to like them.
*context change and making it fitting to the previous line*

117
It's important to feel as unrestricted as possible,
Especially because we're playing outdoors today,

118
especially when we're playing outdoors like this!
I bet it's important to have some sense of freedom!
*switching these lines. Sense of freedom as in explained in the following line*

167
but it actually tastes a lot like steak curry.
but it actually tastes a lot like steak curry. It's delicious.
*don't forget he likes it*

199
{\c&HFCFCFC&\3c&HCB999A&\4c&HFFFFFF&\pos(379,336)}Chaos on the School Field Trip!
{\pos(72,469)\fscx113.75\fscy107.5\4c&H4284B3&\c&H26D930&}¢Confusion at the {\c&HA84FDC&}School Field Trip!£
*when the title says "konfyuujon", I can't let you edit that*

203
and none of them looked\N particularly troubled or anything.
and none of them looked\N particularly scared or anything.

308
This definitely looks like a place a monster would live in.
This definitely looks like a place a spidery monster would live in.

323
I only did that because you weren't paying attention to where you were going!
I only did that because you weren't looking ahead!
*too much words for the time*

328
River of Black Strings!
Kurokawa Karen!
*It's the weapon(curse?)'s name*

365
The screams from the unseen victims...

392
Now then, I'll let you guys in on a little secret.
Now then, I'll let you guys in on a spoiler.
*not necessary change*

425
Why won't you understand my feelings, Sovereignty?
I haven't had my share of your loveliness yet...

426
I'm here to charge my love meter for you!
I actually came here to recharge on that part, but...

436
Your scent is so comforting. It sorta feels like my mom is hugging me.
It appears there really {\i1}was{\i0} a monster around here!
*what an interesting guesslation*